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The Epiphany

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Score 4       Learning Experience

Score 4       Family Conflict: Moving Out

Score 4      Celebrating Clemencia

Score 5      Being Responsible        

Score 5       Death of a Loved One        

Score 5      "Love………"

Score 6       Determination

Score 6      A Meaningful Life

Score 6      MOTHERHOOD

The Writing Assignment

Tell about an important moment in your past that let you see clearly something about yourself that was, until that moment, obscure.  Some writers call such a moment an "epiphany," an almost religious insight; others speak of the "aha!" experience, which reveals truth. Your writing will both capture the moment for yourself and help your audience see what you have seen.

Score 4

Learning Experience

A resident from Okinawa, Japan, I came to United States in March 21, 1995 to complete my undergraduate degree. During four years of study, I have learned a great deal of American Culture along with English as a second language itself. Being in another culture is as learning more about my own culture and own identification of who I am and who I really belong to. If I had never left my country and had such experiences, I would probably be blind still. Here I am; I came to realize my family values: how important Family is important.

Japanese culture is called a "high culture" along with other Asian cultures as Chinese culture, which means that culture has a long history and a great deal of traditions. Since I was a child, my parents told me how important it is for family members to get together and help each other. My mother used to tell me, " you couldn’t trust anybody but your blood; your blood would be there for you when you needed help but nobody else." Everything is for family, family, and family. I probably have been forced to believe in family tightness because it has stayed in the corner of my head at all the time. Coming to United States, away from my family, is my idea or a remedy to solve my problem but the escaping cannot answer the question. The first two years of staying in the United States was wonderful. I was exposed to new people, attitudes, and atmosphere. Sometime it is hard to be away from home but still, I could not realize how important they were to me till a month of May 1997.

It was a middle of finals week in Tennessee where I was going to the University before I transferred to Cal State San Bernardino. I checked a message in the answering machine from my younger sister after I came back from my classes. She was crying on the answering machine saying, "Please call me back!" It sounded like bad news. First, I thought she had some trouble with her friend because she always has had some problem with her new friends. I knew it was too early in Japan, so I waited for a couple of hours to call her back. When I called her back, I found out that my dad had been in a car accident; he was run over by taxi cab driver on the way home. She did not know exact the details what happened to him, but she knew that he was brought to the hospital, unconscious.

I panicked and I told her I would call home and find out more about father’s condition. She told me I should not to do so because my mother did not want me to know about the accident. I was shocked. Why? Why did she not want me to know about it: I am their daughter. Questions and confusions came in to my mind. I waited one day to see if she would call me back; she did not. I called home the very next morning. My mother told me, "Everything is fine. Your father is going to be okay. How are your classes?" I was trying to find out my father's condition, but she would not tell me as much as I wanted her to. "I am going home tomorrow," I said. My mother’s response was "no." She told me to come home after I finished all the finals, for summer vacation.

I tried to get ticket to go home. It was too expensive to get a flight within a week, and I had to wait three weeks to go home. Those three-weeks seemed longer than years. I couldn't think about anything but going home. I worried not only about my father but also my mother. I wanted to know why she did not want me to find out about my father's accident. When I got to the hospital, my father was suffering from broken shoulder and leg and head injury. I could see a lot of fatigue in my mother. Later, I found out that my father was unconscious for three days. It seemed so unreal that my father was in bed with a lot of cuffs and IV drips. He was just moved from ICU (intensive care unit) to a normal room. My mother was acting when we were around her, but I could see her in her eyes the reason why she did not want me to tell me about the accident on that day. She did not want me to worry because I was on other side of Pacific Ocean and there was no way I could come home.

From this experience, that moment I saw my father and mother’s face, I realized that no matter how busy I was, how far away I am, family was really important to me. I was going to quit school and stay home that year, but my parents told me I should not. I started it, so I had to finish it. One of the reasons I moved to California from Tennessee was to be closer to home, to be able to get direct flight to Japan. I am planning to graduate soon, hopefully, this June. I am so happy that both of my parents are planning to come and see me.

 

 

Score 4

Family Conflict:  Moving Out

I was five when my parents divorced and six when my mother remarried. The transition was not an easy one for me. At the age of eight my mother and her husband had the first of two children. Jim, my mother's husband, and my relationship became strained due to conflicting personalities and the addition of his and my mother's natural children. Over the next six years our household was a battleground; sides were taken. It was after one such battle that I declared victory for myself by leaving. I was fifteen; it was the last day of my freshman year in high school and I had no idea when I woke up that I would be moving out that evening.

Mornings were hectic for our family. My mother left early for work leaving her husband and I to get the girls and our selves ready for school and work. Jamie and Jan were seven and six at the time and still needed a great deal of attention in the mornings. Being the young children they were, they tended to be slow causing Jim to lose his patience and grow upset with me. Being the oldest, blame falling on my young shoulders was common, I was the oldest therefore I should know better.

The clock was ticking, we were making Jim late, and I stood downstairs with Jan waiting for Jamie. She couldn't find her backpack. Jim had been yelling most of the morning and felt it would be helpful to continue, "Jamie stop being stupid and find your damn backpack".

Hearing him call a seven-year-old stupid for something as trivial as a lost backpack was becoming too familiar. Famous sayings of Jim included, "You're being a jerk", "Stop talking just to hear yourself talk", and "You're being stupid". I had grown used to the daily verbal abuse, and in the later years had learned not to cry and to stick up for myself. This sign of independence wasn't well received by Jim, who thought I was being smart. Although I had grown stronger, I wasn't immune to the name calling, especially when it was directed at two small innocent children. It broke my heart to hear the way he spoke to and treated them.

"She isn't stupid," I told him.

"You shut up," was his oh so clever response.

Finally we made it out the door. Jim dropped me off at school without a word. Walking into class I sat down next to my best friend, Mike, and cried away the last day of my freshman year. Mike had known me for the previous two years and was used to seeing me crying. He listened, as he was always willing to do. I told him how tired I was of the yelling and fighting. In the family I was a constant source of arguments between my mother and Jim. Guilt had begun to develop in my mind. I was convinced I was causing problems with the girls and didn't want them to have the life I had had for so many years. I decided to leave.

I was the first one home. With resolve I picked up the phone and to call my mom at work. "I'm leaving and I'm not coming back till he's gone."

"Ok." She didn't have to ask why; I had ten years worth of reasons.

The next call I made was to my dad. "I'm moving in is that ok?" He too said ok and didn't need to ask why.

I went to my room. The idea to leave had struck me with a sudden force that morning. Throughout the day I had wavered about my choice. Now looking about my room of fifteen years the decision became clear. In reality I had already made the choice. Going to my closet I saw that I had packed many of my things. I don't remember doing it, but I had been packing for awhile. The realization of the moment struck me. I had known for a long while that I needed to get out and had started preparing. Observing my clothes and personal items in boxes was a moment of great significance for me. The insight into my subconscious reassured me in my endeavors. I was doing the best thing for myself.

The rest of the afternoon I was busy with the rest of my packing. I waited for my mom to get home. When she did we packed her trunk with my things and left. I sat silently in the front seat of her car holding a stuffed dog, Katie. I was leaving my mom, sisters and my home. Luckily I wasn't going far, my father only lived across town.

That evening Jim came to talk to me. We spent over an hour together sitting and talking. He talked while I sat. I listened to him tell me how we were going to be a happy family and he and I could work it out. Everything was going to be perfect. There wasn't a sincere word out of his mouth in that hour. In reality he was mad that my mother had made him apologize at all. When our "bonding" talk was over I went back to my dad's, where I stayed.

In the months and years that have passed since that day I have become a much happier person. My relationship with my father grew stronger. I never said a bad word about Jim to the girls, although in recent years they have begun to confide in me their own feelings of dislike for him and are learning to speak up for themselves. Jim and I don't speak much, we spend some time together when I visit the family and manage to be civil for a few days a year.

I made the right choice in leaving. Seeing my things packed before I had made the conscious decision to leave helped convince me that it was what I needed to do. It has made me a better person. In the last six years I have never regretted the choice I made to leave. It was what I needed to do to have a chance at a happy childhood and young adulthood, which in turn has made me a happier adult.

 

 

Score 4

Celebrating Clemencia

Most people dread funerals so I don’t feel isolated in my phobia. Eighteen years went by before I attended a funeral. It’s not that there weren’t any deaths in our family because we had our share. Aware of my fear, my parents never pushed me to attend these burials. However, an unforgettable phone call that I received after losing my aunt opened my eyes to how my phobia affected more than just me.

I was a freshman in my undergraduate program when my Aunt Billie passed away. My unfulfilled vows to visit her tormented me when I received the news. Punishing myself, I went to her funeral. It was exactly how I expected, odd. Of course, everything was black; limousines, coffin and the attire. Everyone participated in this void ness. The choir drudged through dreary songs as tears fell throughout the church. The building was so small; I couldn’t avoid seeing the unfamiliar shell in the casket that hardly resembled my Aunt Billie. Being in the first row made me feel as though I was lying right beside her in the casket. When I noticed the stitches that held her eyes shut, I couldn’t help sinking into my own black abyss.

Crying tremendously left the whole funeral a tearful blur to my memory. However, as promised, I received my punishment. One thing that I remembered from the whole ordeal was when the Preacher Jones said, " Stop saying that you lost Billie. When you lose something, you don’t know where it is. You know where she is; with our sweet savoir!" The black-robed preacher continued pouncing around the alter like a panther ready to attack the congregation for not repenting from their sins. As intimidating as his sermon fell, it made sense and it stuck with me.

The only other person who could help make sense of it all was my grandmother. Gung (an affectionate name we gave our grandmother) knew what funerals meant to me and she helped the pain subside. Her frail, but comforting hands continually rubbed my back through the funeral. Whenever the preacher glared at me as though I was his next victim, I laid my head on Gong's bony shoulders. Her soft, salt and peppered hair would tickle my forehead as I inhaled her subtle perfume. Gunga beauty lit up any room or situation; tan complexion, wisdom-filled brown eyes and soft spoken lips. As I embraced her beauty, My guilt seemed to seep right into her because she immediately read my pain.

"You know hey-hey (my nickname), Billie knew that she was sick and she didn’t ask you to come see her just for a visit. It was her way of getting you to come celebrate her entry to a better place. You see the good Lord wants us to rejoice when our love-ones pass over. They made it!"

Gunga always had a way to turn my worst fears into comfort. I didn’t know what I would do without her until she passed away also. It was three months before my wedding. She called me early Saturday morning. Gunga was so considerate, never calling because she always thought that she would be taking away from my time for studying or playing with my daughter. So when she called, I was so excited and shocked to hear her little weak voice on the other end. She teased about having her dress and hat ready for my wedding before my mom did. She told me that she loved me and that she was so proud of me because I was the first grandchild of thirteen to get my degree. When I was a young girl, she would always say that she wanted the Lord to sustain her to see me graduate from college one day and get married. Now, the final big day that she wanted to see was so near.

I wanted Gunga to be at my wedding more than she did. That was the problem. Gunga was diagnosed with heart disease three years before my wedding. When she was diagnosed, the doctor gave her a year to live. Two years after cheating death, she whispered "We both made it," at my college graduation.

During our early morning conversation, the epiphany of me having to let go of her suddenly hit me. I realized that she was holding on so that I wouldn’t be faced with my phobia right before my wedding. Comforting Gunga for a change, I told her, " You know Gunga; I truly love you. We have accomplished so much together. I want you to rest and feel better. You don’t have worry about fixing my problems. Promise me that you will try to rest more, promise. That’s all I want for my wedding is for you to be okay."

"I promise hey-hey. Now get off the phone because you’re running up my bill." We laughed and she hung up. Remaining on the phone for a minute, I debated on whether or not to call her back because my heart felt that it was the last time that I would hear her voice. A couple days later, Gunga peacefully slipped into her final slumber.

At the beginning of the funeral, my aunt read a letter that was written by Clemencia "Gunga" Peterson. Her demands were that we smile and rejoice for her journey home to her Father. "Yolanda (My aunt who was reading the letter), please tell my grandchildren to take care of each other and don’t waste my food. I want them to clean their plates at dinner tonight!" The closing of the letter asked for our participation in a song that she selected. After my aunt pitifully left the pulpit, the choir director shouted, "Hit It!" The band started playing a jazzy rendition of the song "When the Saints Go Marching In". We all started laughing because we could imagine Gunga marching right up to those pearly gates and getting a smile out of Peter as he opened the gates for her.

As the song filled my ears, tracked down my throat, and empowered my inner being, I started singing and clapping my hands. Walking through the church and hugging all of my family members and friends seemed only natural during this uplifting melody. Some people were reluctant because they wanted to participate in the traditional voidness, but they eventually succumbed. If any one could bring joy to the dreary, it’s Gunga and she was still in business. Though I asked her to rest, she was still teaching me by helping me to overcome my phobia and love people enough to let them go.

Not every funeral will be like Gunga’s (she has a style all her own) so I still have some reservations to get over. However, my continuous prayers are for me to help make each journey a celebration and deliver light where it is void. Most of all, I thank God that I found the strength to stand on my own two feet through the very close relationship I had with my grandmother. Now, I found extreme comfort that my Clemencia is getting her rest!

 

 

Score 5

Being Responsible

I graduated from University of Trisakti at the end of 1997 with a bachelor degree in engineering. Realizing that I had passed the last comprehensive test, I experienced tears of joy at that moment as if that time was the greatest accomplishment that I ever had in my life. Afterward I called up my mother and said, "Mom, I did it, I passed the test with a good grade." And with tears falling down from my eyes I said, "Thank you mom, for all the prayers and encouragement that you have given me, allowing me to pass my entire comprehensive test with an excellent score." In fact, I realized that my mother is the key to my success.

The next day, I decided to look for a job that will satisfy my needs. However, I felt lazy to look for one because I feel that I have the need to be free from all the coursework's. After studying for five years to achieve my Engineering Degree I felt that this was the right time to have some type of relaxation. Unfortunately, I had to cancel my vacation plan because I had no place to go. Therefore, I decided to look for a job.

When I was a student in the university, I had a very bad habit of waking up late in the morning. Usually, I woke up around noon or later than that. Thus, if I had classes in the morning and felt that I did not want to wake up I would call my friend and asked them to sign up my name on the attendance roster. In fact, I kept this habit until I graduated with my B.S degree in Industrial Engineering. I continued this bad habit by sleeping the whole day and having fun on my routine.

Following my sleeping laziness my father called me up and asked me to talk with him. He says, "Do you realize that in the last few weeks you have not done anything other than sleeping, eating and traveling? Do you expect to have a successful future if you just hang around every single day?" I replied to my father by saying, "Dad give me a break, I don't want to be stress at this moment." However, my father told me that I need to think about my future career because I am the architect of my own success.

Following that hectic conversation, I started to think about my father's advice. I began to realize that I was being too lazy for the last few weeks and I needed to change my bad behavior. Therefore, on the next day I started to look for a job in the newspaper and began to send some of my applications to the potential companies.

After a few weeks, a letter surprisingly came to my house explaining that there was a company who were interested on my applications and looked forward to have an interview. At that moment, I felt happy to have a chance to get a job interview because I have never thought about this opportunity before. By having the chance for the interview I could prove my ability to my parents and myself especially my father. The next day, I went to the company for an interview. While I was driving, I tried to relax myself by hearing some soft music. After I arrived at the company, one of the HRD representatives gave me an interview for about 30 minutes. At the end, the representative told me that he was going to contact me after his manager reviews the interview's result.

After a few days gone by, one day my mother shouted at me and told me that there was a telephone call. When I picked up the phone I realized that it was from Triguna Corp., which was the company who had interviewed me a few days ago. My heart started to beat very fast and my mind began to wonder about what was the call about. However, when I answered the phone the officer told me that his manager approved my interview and wanted me to start working on Monday morning at 8 a.m. As a result, I hung up the phone and told my mother that I got the job. With a happy face she told me how proud she is to have a son like myself. Also, she informed my father about this good news and he replied to me by saying, "That's a very good news son, but you still have to remember that this is just the beginning of a long and hard working day. You have to wake up early every morning and come home late at night!" I realized the fact that my father words were true, but I still could not understand why he could not be proud of my achievement.

The next day my mom woke me up at 7 o’clock in the morning. Although my eyes were very heavy, my mother kept forcing me by saying, "Harry, hurry up and take a shower. It's already 7 o'clock, you have to be at the office before 8 o’clock!" I forced my feet to walk on the cold floor in order to go to the bathroom and take a shower. After I finished my shower and got dress up the time was already 7.45 a.m. So I quickly drove my car to the office. However, the traffic is very heavy and really slowing me down from reaching the office at the right time.

After spending about 20 minutes of traffic in the road, I finally arrived at the office. When I sat down on my chair, the boss secretary came toward me and told me that Mr. Bob want to see me right away. At that time I knew something was going wrong. Thus, I jumped right away from my chair and started to walk toward my boss' office. I knocked at the door and from inside I heard him inviting me to come inside his office. I came in and greeted him by saying, "Morning Sir." He replied back to me and told me to sit down at the chair while he was finishing something on his computer. My heart was beating very fast and my hand was sweating as if I was in the middle of a big confrontation.

After completing his computer works, he asked me about the reason of my lateness. With a trembling voice I told him that the traffic was the cause. I said, " I am sorry sir, but the traffic was very busy and that is why I came late today. However, he said that the traffic was not an excusable factor to come late on the first day of my job. His faces started to turn red and he appeared so angry at me. I just sat there and listened to what he had to say. In fact, I realized that I have done a very bad thing. After he explained the fatal things that I have done, he grabbed a piece of paper from his printer, asked me to read it, and signed it at the end.

When I started reading the paper I began to realize that the letter was intended to verify the end of my status at the company. In a simple word, I have been fired. I was shocked and disappointed. I looked at my boss eyes and projected my disbelief at his decision. Although my boss apologized for his decision by saying, "I am sorry to give you the letter but that is the company policy," I still could not belief the reality. I felt as if my heart has stopped beating for a moment.

However, I have learned a lot of things from this valuable lesson. I have learned that in order to become a successful person I have to be discipline and to be responsible. In fact, I have to teach myself to omit my laziness by waking up early in the morning. Although the painful experience about getting fired from a company still haunting me but I tried to look at that experience as an essential factor who have change the way I think, act, and behave myself. Now I realized the importance of discipline and responsible in determining one's success. I hope this valuable experience will guide me to the future and that I can use it as a valuable asset to become a successful person.

 

 

Score 5

Death of a Loved One

Throughout ones life it is inevitable that they will experience the emotions that one feels when a loved one dies, however, death is a matter in which many people can never truly prepare for. When older people die it seems somewhat acceptable or expected, but when it is a young person people often deem the situation as unfair. My experience with such an instance made me realize several things about myself that without actually going through this moment this part of me would have remained obscure.

I awoke on Sunday, November 10, 1996 thinking how great if felt not to have to go to work. I couldn’t wait to call my friend Gilbert to see how the big flyer party went the night before. My parents banned me from partying that particular weekend. For some reason I kept feeling like I had missed out on something by not going to that party. My mother accused me of being a "wild child" because she said I could not refrain myself from going to a party for one weekend without throwing a fit. It was not that I really wanted to be out. I was feeling guilty because Gilbert was a little upset with me due to the large amount of time I had been spending with my boyfriend.

It was tradition for Gilbert and I to have nightly discussions on the telephone, whether it was about something on television or personal matters. Our peers often thought we were romantically involved, but we profusely explained that we were like brother and sister. People never quite understood how two people so different could be such good friends. He always told me that having me around was like having a second mother. I insisted on verifying that he did his homework for class and that he did not consume too much alcohol when we went out. Gilbert influenced me not to be such a "school girl," which many would say is not such a good thing, but I learned to enjoy high school instead of being filled with stress.

Everything about that particular Sunday and my life changed so abruptly as I picked up the phone to hear my friend Vanissa’s panicked voice on the other end.

"Ness, what’s wrong," I asked.

She replied, "Gilbert’s mom hasn’t heard from him since last night and we thought he might be at your house. "

"No, I haven’t heard from him, but I know it’s not like him to forget to call his mom."

"Can you page him 9-1-1? He usually calls you back, right?"

"Yeah. He has never NOT called me back anytime, except for when he’s at work."

I paged Gilbert at least five times and still an hour went by with no response. My intuition had led me to believe that something was terribly wrong. Anxiously awaiting his phone call, I picked up the phone on the first ring-only it wasn’t Gilbert. It was Vanissa again. This time all that came out of her mouth was, "He’s gone Jen!" I dropped the receiver and stood in shock because my internal assumptions had been confirmed; my best friend was dead at age seventeen. My father had been standing next to me because he too was awaiting the outcome of that call. He had earlier told me that I was over reacting to Gilbert’s lack of response to the pages I had sent him. Tears began to roll down my cheeks and I was suffocating like a fly drowning in honey. My father attempted to comfort me and all I could do was hit him fiercely in the chest.

"Ness said he’s dead! No, he can’t be dead," I shouted from the top of my lungs.

It was at that particular moment that I realized I never told him how much his friendship meant to me. It seemed too "cheesy" to me that I should tell Gilbert I loved him because I felt odd sharing such words with anyone. Now I see just how naïve I was to think that words could not be so powerful and refreshing. Every once in a while I dream about seeing Gilbert and telling him "Thank you for your friendship and all those wonderful, funny memories I have of us together." I suppose, in a way, this is my way of letting him know how I feel because I can finally admit my mistakes to myself.

The Riverside Sheriff’s report said that Gilbert was in a van traveling at 90 miles per hour. The driver and the other three passengers, including Gilbert, were drinking that night. As they were turning off the Rubidoux exit the van hit a transistor box. It exploded on impact and all four young men died immediately. We were lucky enough that Gilbert had his pager on him that night because it flew out of the car. Had the pager not fallen out, the Sheriff would not have been able to identify the victims for their bodies were charred to ashes.

Before that moment of realizing a person I really cared about was no longer just a phone call away, I used tell people I did not have time for them. I was too concerned about working and making sure my love life was not too dull. Spending time with my family always used to be last on my priority list, but now I try to spend every moment possible with them. It is also important for me that everyone else around me enjoys the time we share just as much I do. I never want to take anyone’s time for granted just as I do not want him or her to take me for granted. I have also realized the power of words and communication. Not a day goes by that I do not wish I would have told Gilbert how much of the void he filled in my life, but I am grateful to have learned such a valuable lesson at an age where I still have a chance to make good use of it. I will do my best to let my present and future family members and friends know how I feel about them. It saddens me to know that Gilbert’s death was the only way in which I found this thoughtless side of me.

 

 

Score 5

"Love………"

How many of us fantasize about true love growing up? When we’re young we see a lot of fairy tales or movies romanticizing love in people’s lives, but does this apply to real life? Do people ever really live happily ever after? Perhaps some do through trials and tribulations, perhaps some don’t. It must be said, however, that the ending is mostly up to each character determining their own fate or destiny through decisions they make in life. When people get married, they are choosing a partner for life and in that sense are pre-determining their own destiny, happy ending or not.

My mother always instilled the best morals and values in my brother and I when we were growing up. Her philosophy on choosing a mate for life includes specific criteria that each candidate must meet. For example, I should marry someone educated, on the same intellectual level as I am, who has similar career or academic goals. He must come from a good family, have a good job, and have no prior entanglements such as children. Much to my mother’s dismay, I went against her standards when I entered my first serious relationship in high school.

I was always better at making friends with guys rather than other girls in high school, which explains why my boyfriend and I got to know each other so quickly. Freshman Spanish class was where we talked the most, joking and disrupting class frequently. At the time, he had a girlfriend and I a boyfriend, so we often talked and traded advice. Over the next two years we became best friends throughout different relationships with other people. Many people suspected that we liked each other and were already seeing each other, yet we hadn’t crossed the line of friendship to romance. The decision to cross that line was initiated by him, and followed through by me. We had been close friends for two years, so I trusted him a great deal and felt I knew him like a book. When we were freshmen, he had asked me to be his girlfriend. I turned him down believing it would ruin our friendship. After that, I always wondered what might have been, so when he asked again two years later, I decided to give it a try.

There is a sense of comfort in knowing someone so well that you know what he or she is going to do or say before they even do it. This was the feeling I grew to have after being with my boyfriend for a year and a half. I knew he was on the jealous side, that he was quick tempered and sarcastic, but that he loved me. There wasn’t anything I wouldn’t have done for him, nor was there anything I didn’t do to show him that he meant everything to me. Watching all those movies about true love growing up, I came to believe in it while with him. I knew I hadn’t felt this way about anybody before and truly foresaw a happy ending despite my mother’s misgivings.

Summer arrived and I had just graduated high school. I was living with my dad because my mom had kicked me out of the house. She was over her limit of tolerance when it came to my boyfriend. My boyfriend and I saw each other every day, and I had just gotten off work and was on my way to his house. I wasn’t feeling too well because I had an ear infection and a cold, but I wanted to see him anyway. When I arrived at his house it was about nine thirty at night and he was moody as usual. 

Sitting down on the coach in his room I asked "So how did your day go sweetheart?" 

"What do you mean how did my day go? It went the same as it always does," he smartly replied. Then he asked "So why’d you write some big long message in Mario’s yearbook?" 

He and Mario had been best friends since junior high school, and he and I had been friends since that same Spanish class freshmen year. 

I asked, "What are you talking about? He wrote in my yearbook too, and it’s not like we’re not friends. What’s the big deal?" 

"The big deal is I don’t think you had to write all that stuff in his yearbook," he remarked implying guilt. 

I said "Well it’s not like you two don’t know each other. You know we’re just friends and I didn’t write anything bad like ‘give me a call sometime’ or something." 

"I don’t care what you wrote, I don’t need you making me look stupid," he retorted. 

Finally tired of his jealousy and ridiculous accusations I shot back" You know what? Fine! I won’t make you look stupid anymore because this relationship is over!" 

I stormed out the door, slamming it hard behind me. My ears were ringing and I was mad with a headache. Realizing he was going to be quite upset at my outburst, I hurried to the car, got in and started the engine. Just then he threw the front door open wildly, heading towards my car with thundering footsteps. A chain link fence that must be opened in order to drive out enclosed his yard; I was stuck. Helpless, I kept the doors locked and the car running, praying he would let me out of the yard. He began pounding on my driver side window and shouting at me to unlock the door, I saw no other choice. I felt the hearing go out in my left ear as he pulled me from the car and threw me on the ground. His parents were gone and he lived in a neighborhood where a cry for help would go unheard, and so I remained powerless. An hour later I left, amazingly in one piece and with no major bruises. Crying all the way home and finally to sleep, I had nightmares all night long.

Compared to other women in abusive relationships I was very lucky to have gotten through unscathed physically, but emotionally I was scarred deeply. All of my effort, love, and trust had been thrown back in my face. I didn’t believe in anything anymore, love, life, or myself. When I broke up with my boyfriend afterward, he was angry and threatening. At first I played into this by still calling him so he wouldn’t come to my work, then I realized he was all talk. If he really was determined to hurt me he was just going to do it instead of just threatening to. I began to challenge him and told him I wanted nothing to do with him. For awhile he would get very angry and threaten me more, but I realized he was just mad because he wasn’t getting his way. Finally he gave up his tactics and let me be, apologizing profusely for everything after a long period of time passed. This was a turning point in my life because I realized that I have to put myself before other people. Blinded by love, I ignored warning signs of violent behavior and the fact that we had a bad relationship all together. I saw for the first time that love was not the most important thing life, but that being happy and independent was. As a result, I can’t say I regret that relationship because I learned so much from it, how to stand up for myself, believe in myself, and demand the respect that I deserve. I will never settle for less than what makes me happy, and I can now go into a relationship with open eyes. My self-confidence and esteem rose so high that I wouldn’t take back those years with him if I could. Staying in that relationship would not have led to a happy ending; I can make my own fairytale by controlling what I do in life, with school, careers, and love. I’m just glad he was my boyfriend and not my husband, a mistake to learn from and move on from. Does true love exist? Yes; but it must be felt mutually to provide a happy ending, and it’s up to every character to control their own destiny and not rely on fate to do all the work. Every person believes in love to at least some small degree, but sometimes love must be overlooked and set aside as a smaller priority to find true love, and patience and selectiveness are definitely virtues.

 

Score 6


                                                                   Determination

When I was younger, I thought of myself as a coward. I was afraid to take risks, and for the most part went through life passively, often regretting afterwards the chances I chose not to take. In the past few years, however, I have undergone various experiences which have negated that feeling of cowardice. The culmination of these experiences came on September 19, 1999, as I hung roughly five thousand feet over Perris Valley, and in that precarious position I came to a realization. 

Sky-diving: it is the true cliché of testing courage. The part of the experience which is most difficult is also the simplest; it is merely the action of taking a single step. But while the muscles allowing the movement are not aware of the consequences of their actions, the mind is, and getting my mind around that simple step is a challenge I was never sure I could overcome. 

I had been challenged before, sometimes by others, but most often by myself, striving to break out of that feeling of cowardice. I began testing myself as a direct response to the fear I had felt in other situations and the regret which usually followed when I failed to conquer that fear. I disliked being afraid, but I disliked even more the way I thought of myself as I succumbed to that fear; as a result, I would force myself to do whatever it was of which I was afraid. 

While I had the idea somewhere in the back of my mind, however, I never gave it direct thought. In each case wherein I made myself work through my fear, whether I was snowboarding down a slope faster than the last time, climbing a difficult rock without the safety of ropes, or even asking a girl out, I never consciously thought about why I made myself do the things which frightened me. With some activities, obviously, having fun was a part of it; while there were other reasons behind it, speeding down the hill or inching up the rock was exhilarating because it was scary. 

This is also applicable in part to sky-diving, so when the opportunity came to step out of a plane and plummet at 120 miles an hour toward the ground, I jumped at it - no pun intended. It was something I had always wanted to do, and I felt that perhaps I was up to it. 

I went with four people from work, and we spent most of the day learning form, procedure, system, and safety. It had been an overcast day, and as regulations would not allow student jumps to proceed under such conditions, there had been delays while the haze cleared. The schedule was pushed forward, and as a result, our group had to wait for an available flight, although we had finished with our instruction. I had an hour and a half to consider what I was planning on doing. Without the instructor to focus on and with nothing to occupy my mind, I sat outside with my friends joking around but primarily obsessing about what I would be doing in the next few hours. 


After the interminable wait, our group was called to prepare; we got into our jumpsuits, had ourselves strapped into the parachutes, and went through several safety checks. We then headed for the plane. I find it odd, looking back, what one never considers in certain situations. When I thought of the parachute pack, I thought of how it looked, and how it would be strapped on; I thought of how the parachute would open, and how it would fly and how I would control it; I never thought about the fact that it weighs forty pounds, the equivalent of carrying a five-gallon Sparklett's water bottle on one's back.

Although the reality of my situation solidified once I was on the plane, I will not say that the flight up was nerve-racking. I was apprehensive, a fact I readily admit with an expectation of understanding. It is a nervousness which closely resembles, at least to me, that which precedes making a class presentation, but slightly intensified. The nervousness increased with every minute, every hundred feet, every slow circle of the landing zone. A specific moment which stands out in my mind is that at which I made the simple but, under the circumstances, very profound realization that I would not be returning to the ground in that plane. Drawing out this tension was the fact that, because I was the first one into the plane, I would be the last one out the door. As I finally approached the open square in the plane and took my position, the apprehension had reached its peak. 

It has occurred to me since that all of my victories over hesitation and fear were, up to that point, brought about by necessity. The necessity, however, was not external but internal. Lives had never depended on my facing fear; nor had friendships or jobs or grades. Rather, it was my own psyche - my ego, my self-image, my determination to succeed (and, in a few aberrant cases, a pitiful desperation) - which began forcing me to do those things which scared me. I considered later that stepping out of the plane might have been different; I had, after all, paid nearly four hundred dollars for this opportunity, and to back out at this point would not provide for a refund. I rejected this possibility, however. Standing at the edge of twelve thousand and five hundred feet, I was not thinking about my money; the only thing I was thinking about was how I would face myself if I failed to take that last step. 

Finding oneself at the last step is in itself an experience. To look out into that twelve and a half thousand feet of empty air and see the expanse of earth lying below, with its thin skin of buildings and roadways now almost indistinguishable - to step to the edge of the plane and feel the wind whipping past - to hear the roar of that wind over the drone of the engines and consider the amount of open space into which one will jump - is a very focusing experience. At the same time, however, at this point where nervousness should have completely overwhelmed my senses, I found that it instead began to clear. Though I did not consciously block it out, it nevertheless faded as my mind became completely occupied with the procedure I would have to follow from that point on. 
With only seconds having passed since I came to the doorway, the procedure began: check with the instructor on my right; look forward; lean out; lean in; lean out and step out; wait four seconds, then relax into an arched position, knees bent, arms out, and hips downward. It sounds very precise and straightforward when one hears it on the ground; the actual experience, for a novice, is neither. Though I did well, there were four or five seconds following the initial jump during which I went into a sort of quasi-shock, thinking not of the procedure but only of the fact that I was falling, and that although the ground was still very far away, it would approach very rapidly. 

I returned to a state of complete awareness, however, and followed each step of the skydive until that hoped-for moment when I pulled the ripcord and felt the parachute open above me. It opened perfectly, and as I floated silently above the valley, with nothing surrounding me but air for almost five thousand feet in every direction, I had two thoughts. The first was Thank you God thank you thank you thank you, and it was accompanied by an intense exhilaration. 

The second thought, also accompanied by exhilaration (this feeling would pervade my thoughts for at least another hour) but more coherent, was that I had done it. Despite the fear I had of jumping out of a plane, I had stepped to the doorway and then beyond. I had gotten past the fear and had beaten it. Never before had this conquest been so apparent; skydiving had, in a single second, exemplified a mental series of events which had never been so concise. The experience had focused and defined my drive to overcome my fears, and I realized that if I was able to conquer such a direct and immediate fear, it was possible to conquer all others. Though it sounds like an inspirational cliché, it had shown me that my determination was stronger than my fear. 

 

Score 6

A Meaningful Life

When I first met April, she was part of a group of teenagers I often saw at local rock concerts and festivals. Gradually, we spoke more and more, and I discovered that although she cultivated a casual, hippie type persona, she actually was an ambitious honor roll student. She was almost a foot taller than I was, around six feet tall, yet almost timid in her manner. April had long brown curly hair usually worn loose,  had kind brown eyes, and wore sixties-influenced clothes, which reflected her easygoing manner.

April and I often ate lunch together at school and since no one in the group had a date for our school’s Midwinter Ball, we all went together. At the dance, April was the one who told me I should go to the dance floor and dance with the group, even though I was shy. We double-dated with college students from Claremont and went to the Laff Stop where we sat in the front row and were heckled by the comedians. April and I went to Hollywood with her friend Noah and bought silly souvenirs at shops on Melrose Avenue, and we usually were at the same local concerts and would sit together and talk.

Since April was a year older than I  and a grade higher in school, we saw each other less, usually on weekends after she left Riverside to go to college at UC Santa Cruz. We kept in touch by writing letters, and I remember how she wrote several letters telling me how hard it was and that she was having trouble adjusting. I wrote back but I was unsure of how to respond to the bleak tone of her letters.

On Easter Sunday of 1989, my Mom was dropping my brother off at Sunday school and I went along for the ride, and to go out for breakfast afterward. Trying to find a song I liked on the radio, I stayed in the car when they got out. It was a beautiful day, just after a rainstorm the night before, and I could smell the orange blossoms from the nearby groves. When my mom came back to the car, she looked shaken.

"What’s wrong?" I asked.

"There’s been an accident with some of your friends."

One fatality, I didn’t ask who it was.

"They were going back to Santa Cruz while it was still raining, the car hydroplaned and crashed, and someone was thrown out of the car."

I told my mom who I thought it could have been, but I was wrong.

A few days later, I sat at the breakfast nook in my house, eating cereal while reading the Press Enterprise newspaper. I turned to the Obituary section, and I stared in disbelief at the picture. It was April’s school picture, her date of birth, and the day she passed away entered underneath. Tears came to my eyes as I realized that she had been the one killed in the accident on Easter weekend. She was the first person I had ever known who was my age and had passed away.

I called another mutual friend of ours who also could not believe it. We were both almost in shock. I told her I felt guilty because I had not responded to April’s most recent letter even though I had meant to write back soon. Now it was too late.

My friend felt even worse because the last time she saw April, she shared a Coke with her, even though she had a cold, she said afterward, "Well, she won’t die from it."

We both shared our mutual sadness and guilt that our last contact with her had not been what we wished it could have been. I wished that I had written back to her and comforted her, and my friend wished that she had spoken less callously.

My friend and I agonized over whether to go to her funeral. I, even at the age of seventeen, had never gone to a funeral. We did watch some of the funeral from across the street from the cemetery, but neither one of us could bring ourselves to go over. For years after, I would replay the events of that day in my mind and wish that I had had the courage to brave whatever emotion I would have felt and to say a final goodbye.

Even though I did not attend her funeral, for the first time since I was fourteen, I attended religious services, which led me back to attending regularly. The sense of loss I experienced brought me to a realization of the finite nature of life and the need to have meaning in it. Losing April made me rethink the direction that my life was going in and helped me to realize that there was more to life than music, dancing, clothes, and other superficial concerns.

I began to think about what I wanted to do with my life, and one of the answers was that I wanted to study Social Sciences, such as Sociology, Psychology, and Anthropology, which led to my taking some community college courses concurrent with my high school courses. I also brought up my high school grades, and along with becoming more spiritual and focused I also worked harder at being a better friend and getting along better with my family.

Twelve years later, I can see that my adolescent self gave way to the beginning of my adult self on that Spring morning in 1989. Although some of the changes in my life took place over a period of time, they are changes that have remained profound in my life. I completed my Associate of Arts degree in Sociology in 1992. I took a break from school for a while while my husband and I started our family, but I hope to finish my Bachelor of Arts Degree in Social Sciences soon. I have continued to attend religious services and have been a crisis hotline volunteer for ten years. I still remain friends with several of the people I knew in high school.

I still remember April often and I know that her memory will always remain with me and with the other people she knew. Her influence still touches my life. I remember she was kind to everyone and tried hard to include other people in her group and she did what was important to her and did not bow to peer pressure. She taught me how important it is to do the things that have true meaning in one’s life and to appreciate the people we are close to in our lives.

 

Score 6

MOTHERHOOD

Motherhood, who needed it? Being the oldest of six, my siblings ranging from three to eighteen years my junior, I had no illusions or delusions about what having children entailed. Motherhood was fine for my mother, but it wasn’t for me. Taking care of infants and toddlers was not something I enjoyed.

My husband and I were married while in our early twenties. Our customary answer when friends and family started asking us when we were going to become parents was, "never." This answer was mostly a defense to keep the question from being repeated over and over. We did not discuss the question itself between us for many years. Three of my siblings had children, and I told myself that being an aunt was the closest experience to motherhood that I needed. The problem wasn’t that I was sure I did not want to have children. I was just so unsure that I wasn’t ready to make that decision unless it was forced on me, which it was, by age. I, like a stereotype, was not immune to the ticking away of my biological clock.

My husband turned thirty, and I was not far behind. The discussion about becoming parents finally occurred for real. Unless we wanted to wait until we were really old, we should become parents soon. We decided to stop trying not to have children. In a couple of years we would be ready for the experience of becoming parents. Two months later I was pregnant.

The pregnancy came to fruition in the spring with the birth of a beautiful baby girl. Personally, I never thought much of babies. Women gathering over newborns and ogling and cooing always struck me as rather silly and pointless. Babies inevitably all looked alike to me, though perhaps mine was a little bit more charming than most. I experienced what I assumed were normal mom things. Love was an emotion realized. I was sure that I would probably give my life for hers. Watching her sleep for hours while observing the expressions moving across her face was a favorite pastime. When she was old enough to interact with me, she was fun to play with. If she were crying or fussing and I could not figure out why, I felt despair and anxiety myself. Her physical comforts were always foremost in my mind. Dressing her in pretty things and letting other woman ogle and coo over her was an enjoyable experience. I was a mom and thought I knew what motherhood was.

Then, one day, my daughter hugged me. I am sure that the sensations which overwhelmed me cannot adequately be described. Multiply, by an infinite number, the emotions felt when a patriotic song is being sung or at the end of a sentimental movie. Understanding that degree of emotion would not be enough to comprehend fully what I experienced the day my daughter hugged me for the first time. The glands in my throat ached. Tears welled up in my eyes and overflowed. A tingly feeling waved across my scalp. My heart felt like it was expanding in my chest yet breaking at the same time. Breathing became painful and I had difficulty taking in air. The intense physical reactions I underwent were surpassed by the intellectual and spiritual revelations which I discerned at that moment.

She wasn’t yet old enough to say the words, "I love you Mommy." Until that moment, I did not realize that she was a being capable of love. I did not realize that she returned my love. I did not realize, until that moment, the immensity of the love I had for her. My daughter’s arms went around my neck, and I truly realized what motherhood is. Motherhood isn’t pregnancy or giving birth or taking care of a child’s physical needs. Motherhood is the ability to love greatly. I had reached a level of love, of which I didn’t realize a human heart was capable. In my past I had heard religious teachers say that the closest example on earth to God’s love for humanity is the love that a mother has for her child. I finally realized what that expression meant.

Those little arms went around my neck, and I learned that motherhood is the ability truly to love another person with a God like love. It was no longer a probability that I would give my life for hers, but a certainty. Whatever personal sacrifices necessary for her well being and quality of life would happily be made by me. The love I had for her was unconditional. No matter what errors and misjudgments she would make in her life, the quality and abundance of my love for her would in no way be altered or diminished. Each and every milestone reached in her life would give me gratification. When her life experiences cause her to feel inadequate and undermine her self confidence and happiness, I would be able to empathize fully with how she would feel. I knew I would wish to be able to take her pains and hurts upon myself. If the possibility existed to suffer through her emotional growing pains myself, I would be glad to experience them for her. My daughter won’t believe that I will share her pain, anguish, despair, happiness and pleasure, not until she becomes a mother.

It was only a moment. Her arms encircled my neck and she gave me a squeeze - a squeeze that warmed and constricted my heart as well as my neck- a moment that changed my life forever because I finally realized what being a mother meant. I also, during that moment, realized how much my mother loves me.

 

Waiting For The Sky

Throughout my years as a filmgoer, a genre that had always fascinated me is the prison movie. From Paul Newman in Cool Hand Luke to Pam Grier in the Big Doll House, the protagonist is always locked up along with a struggle. This struggle is usually a battle to pass time that can go slower than the time it would take a mentally retarded child to learn nuclear physics. Hollywood’s portrayal of prison life is hopeful and usually full of activity. In the film, Cool Hand Luke, the inmates pass time with card games and egg eating contests. "The Man With No Eyes", a frightening prison guard in the film, always reminds the inmates that their time still belongs to the government. In reality, jail is a far off place from any Hollywood prison film. A movie is over and done with in about two hours, while a real life prison sentence can last an entire lifetime.

There was a point when I entered the Southern California jailhouse when I saw the sky disappear into a concrete jungle. I realized I was without freedom, and my time belonged to "The Man With No Eyes". The guard immediately took away my shoelaces and belt reminding me of Arlo Guthrie’s "Alice’s Restaurant", and how the guards didn’t want there to be any hangings that day. I was given a new name spelled using numbers instead of letters. I didn’t remember it then, and I don’t remember it now, nonetheless, the guards told me not to forget it. I said, "Okay". I was then ordered into a ten by ten ft., concrete room with a steel toilet and sink in the left hand corner reeking of desolate sickness. I was in the company of about sixty-five other men. I didn’t know what time I had arrived at the jailhouse. I wanted the time to pass right to the point when the whole nightmare would end. I found a two and a half inch space on one of the wooden benches, and squeezed between two fragrant smelling men. The man to my left had a head full of unevenly dispersed hair plugs; his paranoid demeanor, complemented his methamphetamine, induced picking of skin, scabs, and anything else on his body mistakenly scooped up with his one inch, filthy fingernails. On my right sat a man who looked like a "poor man’s" version of Kirk Douglas. He appeared as though he was unaffected by the perverse odors escaping from every orifice of his body. He kept mumbling, "I hate fucking faggots, God told me to", over and over. I didn’t acknowledge his existence. I just waited.

I waited in silence. I didn’t know what I was waiting for. Maybe for someone to realize I shouldn’t have been there. Or maybe for someone to tell me they had made a mistake. I couldn’t stand not knowing how long I would be in there. It seemed as though there wasn’t a window within a thirty million mile radius of that room. I wondered if it had grown dark outside. It was still a never-dimming fluorescent inside the small room. I was taught in eighth grade civics that in the United States, a person was innocent until proven guilty. Sitting in that cramped room, I didn’t feel as though I was innocent, and I didn’t remember being proven guilty. I had nothing to occupy myself except my hysterical thoughts and my recollections of the Constitution. I tried to shut off my mind and open up my senses, in order to forget. I inhaled deeply through my nose. Immediately I was hit with a steady barrage of body odor, sweat, halitosis, puke, and feces, but I was unable to shut off my olfactory sense. Many voices without faces continued babbling and blurting the same things over and over again. "What are you in for?" "How much time have you done?" "Who’s your parole officer?" and so on. I thought about the notion of "doing time" that they meant, and how that phrase made sense to me at that moment. I, along with all those other men had given up our time to gaze at the sky, smell newly cut grass, and taste the pure mountain air. All of our new time, inside that small room, was spent waiting for the chance to get back the old time we had given up for idiotic reasons. I needed a cigarette, food, and a bathroom where I’d be able to have a bowel movement without sixty-five men watching me wipe my ass. I had no choice except to wait for all those many things I took for granted, such as shitting without an audience.

At this point a well-groomed man in a nicely ironed, San Bernardino County Police uniform opened the door. His obnoxious smirk showed off the bottom halves of two rabbit-sized teeth. He stood with a reformed posture, constantly adjusting his belt. He said,

" I want everyone in here to line up in the hallway, single filed, hands out in front of you. You will follow me to where you’ll turn in your garments, and get your bed linens. No talking!"

To me, "bed linens" meant a longer stay, longer than the period of a single day. I thought maybe if I was sleeping the time would pass faster. But I didn’t want to sleep without knowing when I would be finished doing "this" time. The officer looked at us like we were all lepers and he was the lucky guy that never got infected. Panic-stricken, I asked the officer if I had a chance of getting out before bedtime. He looked at me like I was a child asking my father for a $100.00 to spend in a toy store. He took a deep breath like he did a job well done that day, and said,

"No one’s leaving tonight unless bail is posted, and that takes eight to twelve hours." Eight to twelve hours, what was that? Twelve hours was a plane ride to London, half of a day, and a hell of a long time to wait for something like freedom. Earlier that day I had notified my heartbroken parents of my arrest. Through all their weeping, they told me they’d come bail me out as soon as possible. I hadn’t planned on exceeding a twelve-hour time frame.

All sixty-five of us lined up in a single file line with our hands in front of us looking like upstanding, hard-nosed criminals. We were then lead into a room where we were informed to strip. There was not one hint of homoeroticism present. I was in the presence of dirty, hairy, acne-scared, wounded, gangrened, uncircumcised, nudity. The worst kind of nudity. As I stood there stark naked in the cold, I felt my manhood shrivel up like the legs of a polio victim. I received my new clothes, which consisted of bright orange pants, a bright orange shirt and a pair of confining white underpants. I looked around the room at everyone in their brand new, matching clothes that glowed like a sunset over Newark, New Jersey. I felt as though the purpose of the new clothes was merely another way of being told that our stay may be an extended one. The color orange became my most hated color in a matter of minutes.

I was then led to my room where I was to stay on my unexpected vacation. I entered the cold, cafeteria-esque room. The colors of the room were bland enough to have sucked the creativity out of the entire Renaissance. The ceilings were cathedral, towering over an orange carpet of guilty men. I spent the following day of my life sleeping and trying to sleep. I didn’t have any dreams though. I waited to be able to gaze into the sky and to have dreams again. On the bed beside me was a little Mexican man. He had hazelnut, colored skin and his hair was a "flock of seagulls". He explained in broken English that when they call your last name and say, "Roll it up", over the loudspeaker, you are free to go.

I waited to hear those words. I’d wake up at night to listen for those words. I wondered what was going on in the world outside. Did my parents forget about me? Did they know I’ve already been waiting for two days? I was in a world that I never thought I would ever visit. Surrealism took on many other new meanings. The sky grew further away in time. And "The Man With No Eyes" drew closer with open arms. At meal times I’d just stare at my grade Z, processed meat and slimy garbanzo beans waiting to go back to my bed and listen for my name attached to that million-dollar phrase. Time was a new kind of abstract. A clock was as common as a filet mignon dinner in that place. Through the few, miniscule, rectangular windows, scattered up high on the back wall, I could see the sky. I didn’t see the sky I once knew. Instead, I saw an Impressionistic painting. The painting changed frequently from blue to white, gray, pink, red, black, and sometimes the dreadful color of orange. I tried to let that vision of Impressionistic art become a method of knowing the time of day, but dawn, dusk, and overcast all looked the same to me. I began to think there was no time at all. There was just a pause in life, as I once knew it.

On the fifth day of my entrapment, waiting, felt like a lost cause. But I had to wait I had nothing else to do. As I lay on my bed, I remembered what I did when I wasn’t spending my days waiting. I remembered the sweet kiss of my girlfriend’s lips, the warmth of a hug from my parents, and the feeling of a warm refreshing shower. At that moment I heard what I had been waiting for, "Joseph, roll it up." A euphoric rush sizzled throughout my entire body. I leaped out of my bed faster than a lion leaping on its prey. I was lead through an institutionalized labyrinth of hallways to get to the room where I was given my clothes back. I yearned for that fresh air which I once knew, as I raced through a plethora of paper work authorizing my release. I scribbled out my final signature and was soon face to face with the exit sign. Its red glow shone back at me in eternal bliss. I stepped outside unworried of explanation to my family and the path that lay ahead of me. All I could do at that moment was gaze into the luminous mass of the sky above, in utter relief. I know now and I knew at that moment the value of my freedom. I vowed that I’d never have to wait for the sky again, as long as I live.

Adam

 

English 306 final draft grading form for "Epiphany" essay

 

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